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20 Shield agents led by Captain America(MCU) must raid Rand Enterprises HQ. in NYC.
The Defenders are on the top floor and waiting for the raid.
Shield has debriefed Captain America on each Defender so he has an idea of their powers but has never faced them.
Cap wins if he captures/KOs all the Defenders. 3 out of 4 also counts as a win.
The Defenders win if they neutralize both the agents and Captain America.
I appreciate the critique, Fox. Always looking to improve, you know.
Honestly, my wife said the same thing about that line. It didn't really sound like him so it wasn't really believable. I had touched it up but felt like he would say that if he was frustrated enough. Trying to remember that this is the MCU version of him and he's young. I needed him to be a little uncooperative so I could make the match happen. Which is on me for not planning it better.
I'm glad you liked Peters part. That was my favorite part too.
Next time I'll do better about explaining the characters just a little bit in case no one knows them.
I haven't watched Assassination Classroom yet, but based on my general knowledge of the characters and a few Wikipedia articles, I think Class 1-A will win. They are capable of winning based on their various powers working in their favor. A few of them are going to die, probably most of them honestly. But I can see the heavy hitters in the class making it out. They could even give Korosensei a run for his money. Korosensei will probably give up once he feels his students have failed.
I like the writing here, but it does have a few errors in spelling and grammar. It's only a few though and doesn't really take away from the story.
I especially love the beginning of this. Asano's speech was really cool and I loved the way you wrote it.
I'm unfamiliar with the Izuku character.
It's not really required, though, as I purely rate on the quality of the fight set-up writing itself.
The first half Peter Parker narration was good. It had a hook and I was interested to see where it was going.
The second half from the Izuku perspective didn't stick the landing for me though. Now, I know who Peter Parker is, thoroughly, so I kind of glossed over that that there was nothing there in the first half that would have clued me into the character if I didn't know it already.
When I got to the Izuku half, I really wanted that one sentence that would give me, the reader, an information burst about the character.
That's the kind of thing that adds context into understanding motivation and stakes, when they are presented to the reader.
The other problem I faced was this line:
And this took me out of it because I know the Peter Parker character too well. My expectation of the character's actions here would be a lot of dodging, a lot of jumping around and a lot of talking to defuse the situation and get help to figure out why he was mysteriously in Japan.
Solid attempt. Looking forward to the next match.
I have not seen these series, so I can only go by the Fight Set-up.
What I want out of the Fight Set-Up is something that introduces me to the characters, gives me some stakes so I'm interested in the outcome and provides an entertaining scene. And do all that in the micro-story of the Fight Set-up without running on or belaboring the point. That's just good writing. A hook, like found on the back of novel covers.
Bonus if it actually makes me want to see the show that the characters are from.
I'd say this hits all the marks and also makes me intrigued about the shows themselves.