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#1 Mr. Outstanding

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 01:34 PM

If anyone has any pieces, chunks, or scenes of story written you could share them here. I know we have a chapter 1 thread, but this is for those of you who have written or want to write a scene or scenes but don’t know where it will fit in the timeline of the story. We could worry about fitting it in/tailoring it to go along with the rest later. Here’s something I’ve written about the Trolls. I see it going towards the beginning:

Summary: Believing themselves to be mistreated by both human and god (admin) alike, the Trolls have uncharacteristically amassed around one leader, Lord VCM. Their plan is to sack the capital of EF, depose the human and admin leadership there, and set up their own government with which to rule the entirety of EF. The present battle marks the beginning of the “Troll Revolution.” This revolution will spark the “Troll Cleansing,” a coordinated effort by admins and humans to eradicate trolls from the EF. But not all humans will side with those carrying out the cleansing.

VCM, Lord of the Troll Army, surveyed the lines of his troops, stroking his long, dark-green chin with spidery, razor-nailed fingers. There were thousands of them, tall and muscled and brutish. They had trouble staying still; some of them were giggling under their breaths. Trolls. VCM opened his mouth, an exhibit of broken and rotten teeth, jagged teeth. Rows of them. “Where is Malak?” VCM said, to no one in particular among the mass.

“You sent him northwest, my lord,” a voice next to him said. VCM looked down. It was the troll scout he had sent off earlier to Grammaton, the loyalist village with the famous grammar shrine. The stepping stone. “Don’t you remember?” the whining voice said. Of course VCM hadn’t remembered. He was proud of being a Troll, but sometimes he hated the things that came with it, things like a low attention span, like sometimes forgetting important things.

“What of Grammaton?” VCM asked the scout.

“There is a garrison in the town, but it only has about two hundred or so soldiers. The population of the town is maybe another two hundred. But those are not fighters.”

“Any EF Elite in the town?”

“Not any that the Troll Wizard you sent with us could detect.”

“Good,” VCM said.

VCM wanted to smile, but just then one of the trolls in the front row began cackling loudly, his body swaying to some unheard music. His whirling hands hit a troll beside him, sending the troll sprawling. He laughed even louder.

VCM strode over to the young Troll, drew his two-handed sword, and walloped the misbehaver across the chest with the flat of the blade. “Keep yourself together!” VCM screamed, his crooked teeth vibrating from the force of it. The troll laughed. He hit the troll again, this time bringing the pommel of his sword up and into the troll’s nose, eliciting the loud crunch of bone breaking. When VCM withdrew his weapon the troll’s face was even more hideous than before, broken, bloodied nose wrenched to the side. “Keep it together,” VCM said again, as the troll’s laughs became whimpers. “Even though working together is against our nature, even though behaving in an orderly way is against our nature, we have to all keep it together now. Our future depends on it.”

VCM looked over at SSGOKU where he stood among the ranks, nodded at the young captain. SSGOKU nodded back, grim resolve etched into his face. More trolls like that, VCM thought, and we might just have a chance.

* * *

When VCM gave the order to charge into Grammaton, SSGOKU was ready. His muscles had tensed into machinery, his mind had become focused around a point. He remembered the training in focus he had received from the human bandits who had captured him years ago. Their curriculum had consisted of torture. He remembered the pain, bore long scars across his side from fiery brands slicing into him.

Captain SSGOKU was ready. The order had come and he and his squad rolled down the hill with the others, waves and waves of trolls coming down from the hills into Grammaton.

“Kill every one of them!” he thought he heard VCM say. It might have been VCM. Really, it didn’t much matter.

Troll arrows arced overhead, the heads of them ablaze with fire, heading towards the straw roofs of the village. It would be too easy. Time seemed to skip, and then SSGOKU found himself among Grammaton’s soldiers. They had spilled out of the garrison and hastily armed themselves, this attack wholly unsuspected.

SSGOKU drew Corpse Eater, his bastard sword, and whipped it to the side to meet a man rushing at him with his own blade. The force of SSGOKU’s blow cleaved the man in half, his upper torso twisting into the air. SSGOKU wanted to laugh, but he kept the troll nature of himself down. Focus. He told himself. There will be time for trollery later. The trolls in his squadron were on either side of him, engaging humans in battle.

Half the village was already aflame, so many of the villagers were coming their way, escaping the burn. It would be difficult to go any other way because the archers had aimed for the buildings on the sides and rear of the village, igniting those with their burning arrows and creating a half circle of fire. The only way out for the villagers was through the troll army. All of the village would die.

SSGOKU didn’t want to prolong this, didn’t want to relish it like some of the others wanted to. He darted out in front of his squad, attempting to expedite the slaughtering. Kill them quickly, mercifully, he thought.

SSGOKU slew on the left and on the right of him as he charged forward, corpses lining up on either side, Corpse Eater getting its fill. A woman with a baby in her arms darted out in front of him. SSGOKU brought his blade up, then he stopped. The baby was looking up at the monster with curiosity, not tears.

“Flee,” SSGOKU muttered, nodding his head to a smoky lane to the side of them.

The woman obeyed, darting off with her life in her arms, and SSGOKU turned back to the slaughter. But then he heard the twang of arrow being loosed from bow, the sound of bolt whizzing through the air. Something was struck. SSGOKU turned again to see the woman falling, the baby pinned to her chest with an arrow. A loud cackle sounded in the distance.

SSGOKU shook his head, hefted Corpse Eater, and tried to focus again on one point: the slaughter of Grammaton. It would be a stepping stone to taking over the capital, Lord VCM had said. SSGOKU just hoped it would all be worth it in the end.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 01:38 PM

Wow wait I'm not part of the troll army YAYYYYYYYY.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 01:42 PM

Wow wait I'm not part of the troll army YAYYYYYYYY.


You are, but you've been captured, tortured, and twisted into something else.

Dragix will appear a little later.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 01:47 PM

The league ran through the sewers, they were nearing the borders of CBUB, though this was unknown to them at the time. Little chat had occurred since they found Marvel Man, they knew their mission was to get the information back to the CBUB. Suddenly, a noise that they had all been praying to ever hear again was heard echoing, a quack.

Jesus knew what it meant, The admins had found them, but how? There were many explanations, but somewhere in him he knew what had happened, a traitor in the CBUB. He motioned for the ithers to keep going, some seemed sad, some understood it was the right thing. Jesus random numbers used the summoning spell, he summoned the animorphs, he summoned a small pokemon army of mainly machamps, hitmonlees, mankeys, and makuhitas, they were led by a primeape. the army totaled 20 pokemon, the animorphs totalled 22. The quacks were getting closer, Jesus Random numbers took the time to write up his last words, fold them into a paper airplane and throw them at the league, hoping it worked. He then charged.

The admin's army was far too powerful for jesus random numbers to even imagine, he had his own army set up a defense in the sewers, whatever happened, they would not pass through here. Banishment spells shot out only to be stalemated by the equally deadly hyper beams of his own pokemon, for the first 30 seconds it almost seemed like he stood a chance. Then they used FPL magic... the creatures that were produced were so creative, so dangerous, so powerful, that in five minutes Zeus's small improvised army was gone. The admins approached him. "Here is a deal. Give us all you know on the locations of the other rebels, and we will let you live." they spoke.

Jesus random numbers looked up at the admins, he answered calmly, "I will not help you in defeating the CBUB, long live the CBU- Jesus was hit by a banishment spell. The boy known as Jesus random numbers, or zeus, was dead.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 02:01 PM

Jesus random numbers had been found, he thought to himself "but how, i was so careful to not give away my coordinates" he ran for the borders of tropetopia, it was perhaps less than a mile away. A thought occurred to him, "a traitor... damm." he dodged a banishment spell which blew the ground behind him into pieces. He shot back a post spell, but it was cancelled by an edit, half a mile away now he was in a full sprint. Past those borders, the admins could not reach him. He rolled to the side to avoid another banishment spell and kept running. the border was visible now, a few more steps and he'd make it. Jesus random numbers leaped to the borders, he turned around to mock them as he saw a banishment spell. It hit him in the chest no less than a centimeter from tropetopia. The boy known as Jesus random numbers, or zeus, was dead.


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Nice use of the magic system . . . makes one wonder though if Jesus will take try to take on a new "account" (body).

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 02:05 PM

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Nice use of the magic system . . . makes one wonder though if Jesus will take try to take on a new "account" (body).

ive done it before...

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 02:07 PM

ive done it before...


:unsure: At least now you have a fictional outlet for it.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 02:09 PM

:unsure: At least now you have a fictional outlet for it.

alright now, enough talk, post your scenes EFers.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 02:34 PM

Arpia: Land of those for whom silly concepts such as "FPL" or "CBUB" had no meaning, nor rhyme nor reason. Both shallow in their various interest, and both decreeing the other as the enemy.

The fools.

Creationism on the scale of the FPL as well as the canonization that CBUB had so recently taken to bringing to light was two sides of the same coin for those who were enlightened. For those who took upon the role and mantle of a thousand-thousand concepts with a thousand-thousand minds and personalities. This was a country for those who had seen the light. This was a realm, where the only law was his word.

Welcome to Arpia. Home of all things RP-related, and he "The Master" was its nominal leader.

Though born of CBUB stock as "Hugo Fowl", he would eventually leave that place in search of a niche to call his own. Restless and unused to the world, participating in the tournaments of Arpia before leaving to make a name for himself. He smiled at that, recalling his past victories which had all led up to this point in time, namely....Ruler of Arpia. Now he truly was "The Master". At least of where he stood. Let CBUB and FPL battle each other in their petty conflicts. He knew the truth, and idly would walk away from the viewport of his land. His shoulder devil and constant companion Ellisra perched upon his shoulder as she looked at him in slight confusion.

"What ails you Hugo?"

One of the few to call him by his original name, he would glance at her and with a graze of his forefinger stroke her cheek. Chuckling as she purred, her form of the day being that of a Japanese Neko as he looked ahead and spoke.

"This present war has already begun to approach my own borders. Already I have been approached by ambassadors, seeking to cash in on my countries resources. Thus far, I have turned them all away. Arpia has no stake in either side winning, as we have a large source of revenue from both who use us."

She nodded and curled up, leaning against his neck as she hazarded a guess.

"As well as the other realms you currently rule over?"

Hugo smirked at that, his gaze direct as he walked into his trophy room. Passing the displays of teeth, weapons and armour. Obtained from when he had left EF as a whole to hone and train himself as he spoke.

"Very good...So really, we have no true desire for one or the other to actually win, so long as we gain their business. Apria benefits from the War stretching on and out.... Which makes the only true victor in this conflict ironically, and ultimately.....Us."

Her tail twitching with glee, Ellisra would frown suddenly as she spoke. Another thought having occurred.

"But what if a time comes and either side decides to attack us?"

Now he did look at her, a smirk on his face before he glanced at the suit of armour on display before them. Not a trophy, but rather a suit whose role he fufilled many a time as the helmeted gaze of Starkiller looked back and Hugo would speak with amusement.

"Let them try......"

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 04:12 PM

SSGoku sat in his study, a large sheet of paper in front of him, and a pencil in hand. He had spent countless hours in that same position, drawing up meaningless plans. Each one had been better then the last, but still not good enough. This plan had to be perfect, if they were to succeed. But he was running out of time.

Knock knock knock

Goku groaned at this. He had asked not to be disturbed.
"Come in." He sighed. The door opened up to reveal Malek, possibly the only person in the whole world Goku still trusts.
"Sir, we should arrive in Khazan by morning." He spoke. Goku looked up to the ceiling. This was it. This was the culmination of everything he had planned. This was the final attack. The trolls planned on hitting the admins at there heart, the Capitol of all things Electric Ferret Goku had been somewhat relieved. Whether or not they won the day tomorrow, the war was coming to an end. It was hard to believe, after all these years, it was nearly over. The troll side of him wanted to laugh, but the other side, and he didn't quite know exactly what that side was yet, wanted to cry. He ignored both sides and turned back to Malek.
"Thank you… friend." He said. Malek smirked.
"Good luck with the planning." He said, and with that, he shut the door and left. Goku continued to stare at the door for a moment longer, then, he finally turned back to the table. Back to the plan. There was no turning back now, he had to get this done by morning. The fate of everyone in all of The Ferret was resting in his hands.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 04:52 PM

Sighing angrily, Mark Padilla born as ND4 in CBUB would be unable to drive off the troll-like men who purposely messed up the articles, the senior members of Wikipedia had tried so hard to keep from being ‘edited’ by the trolls who often changed things like the president of Wikipedia’s birthday being on December 18, 1965 when in actuality it was in the year 1970. It didn’t really annoy him THAT much, because he didn’t edit these boring articles anyway. He wished the Wikian military did a better job of keeping order around here… He often heard of propaganda saying that Tropetopia should be destroyed and absorbed into Wikipedia. He personally thought the better armored Tropeian troops would crush any attempts by Wikipedia to try and invade them. But today, Mark had enough he would get tired of the trolls, wrong info, and the propaganda…Today was the the day he made the move to CBUB.

Once he had arrived, he would be quickly set upon by the admins for his spelling being atrocious. He couldn’t blame them and it eventually took him two years to finally get his writing in shape. But he still made some mistakes or too. During his time, Mark made many friends such as Jesus something, Hugo Fowl, and Marvel Man. Everything was going good until the war started and he was selected to be the leader.

Not wanting for what happened to Wikipedia to happen to the EF, and personally because of the cruel admins and FPlers, I happily accepted but sadly, we were on a the losing side until Tropetopia began supporting us. Wikipedia catching wind that their enemy was aiding the rebels, they quickly declared war on the rebels and Tropetopia. As of now, Tropetopia was slowly but surely making their way to Wikapedia’s capital of Globe. The admins sent what FPLers they could, but they mostly had to focus on the Tropeian and rebels fighting them right now.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 08:41 PM

"The League!"
By Marvel Man

"Stop him!"

The crowd, ignoring the guard's fierce cry, parted before Marvel Man. Curious tourists rushed to get a picture or even just a glimpse of this legendary man. Words of encouragement rang all around our story's hero, as he fled for his life. To the guard, however, the crowd offered rude remarks and a slap or two instead. Much to the guard's dismay, the crowd sealed back up as soon as Marvel Man passed by, obstructing his way. This brought some *insensitive-ish* remarks from the FPL Elite Commander.

Marvel Man gave a grateful wave to the crowd as the finally broke through. His once well circulated newspaper-blog "Marvel's Corner" had earned him some adoration from the general population.

"Quickly Marvel Man, in here!", a young woman cried out. Trusting his instincts, Marvel Man quickly turned and headed into the small shop. As soon as he was in, the woman slammed the door shut and began to set several locks and bolts. "Thank ya mam. Not everyone would hide a wanted man like myself.", Marvel Man said, as he tried to recover his breath.

"Well, not everyone is a proud CBUB League Member.", the woman said in a cheerful tone. Reaching behind her, she pulled out a worn out League Pin. On it, the once great "League of Extraordinary CBUBers" logo was seen. Marvel Man looked up in awe and surprise, but quickly flashed her a smile.

"I had always thought that women were prohibited from the CBUB. The Admins kept them all locked up in the FPL.", Marvel Man said. The woman nodded. She smiled again. She had nice white teeth.

"No. I wasn't in the CBUB myself. This belonged to my father. He was an old member who enjoyed what you tried to do. He left for the rebel headquarters, back when they were taking recruits. Left me some money and this pin. Anyways, word on the street is that you found some juicy information. Mind telling little ol' me?" The woman moved closer to Marvel Man. Our hero stepped back, but quickly realized that he was up against a wall.

"... eh. Yeah, I got something good. But I really shouldn't say. I need to get this to the others' before I start telling pretty ladies like yourself.", Marvel Man gulped out. He gave her a nervous grin.

"Ah, so you do think I'm pretty!", she happily proclaimed, moving closer still. "Come on. What do I have to do for you to tell me this big secret?"

Marvel Man felt her getting closer still. "Uh... Who did you say your father was again? I'm good with names."

The woman looked startled, but quickly closed the gap between the two. Now her body was pressed up against his. "His name was... Marvelfan15."

Marvel Man's eyes widened. In one quick motion, he threw the woman back. "Almost had me. But Marvelfan didn't have kids. Who are you?!", he shouted out, as he began to slowly make his way towards the door. His eyes were focused on the girl. To his dismay, she began to change shape.

"Ah. I should've guesses Artemis right? Maybe SirMethos? My bad. Anyways, it is I!", the changing blob cried out. "ME! LORD IVAN!!!"

Marvel Man did not wait a second longer. He turned and ran like a little girl. In other words, he did the smart thing. Marvel Man rushed outside and ran towards his original goal, the city's railroad. Seeing a big crowd up ahead, Marvel Man attempted to blend in and maybe get a couple seconds to rest. To his dismay, the crowd had other ideas.

"QUACK!", one member said, as he attempted to tackle Marvel Man. Marvel Man dodged him, but was quickly grabbed from behind by another crowd member. "Let go of me!", he shouted.

"QUACK!", the member answered. "QUACK! QUACK!" the other's agreed. They dove on top of him, pinning his arms and legs to the ground. Marvel Man slipped out one arm and gave several quick punches. Free, he jumped to his feet and slapped away the mind controlled crowd's hands. "I have information that can help all of us!", Marvel Man shouted at them, as he turned to run.

"QUACK! QUACK! QUAAACK!", the mindless horde responded, as they burst after him. The crowd was fast, and Marvel Man was already tired. He gasped for air as he spotted a sewer hole. If he could just make it, he might get away.

"QUACK!", a member shouted, as he grabbed Marvel Man's leg. Marvel Man shook him off, but this caused him to stumble. He heard Ivan's laughter as he fell to the ground. He was a couple inches away from the sewer hole, but it might as well have been miles. The crowd was upon him now. There was more quacking as they ripped his clothes to shreds. It was all over. Darkness began to call Marvel Man.

But then, quite suddenly, a hand reached out and pulled him. The crowd gave some more quacks of surprise as their prey was taken away. Yanking him with great strength, the arm dragged Marvel Man into the sewer. Marvel Man fell into the filthy waters with a splash, but was quickly pulled out by the same powerful arms as before.

"That was close Marvel. You're lucky we were here.", a voice said.

"We?", Marvel Man weakly replied.

"Of course. The League is back..."

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 09:37 PM

"The League!"
By Marvel Man

"Stop him!"

The crowd, ignoring the guard's fierce cry, parted before Marvel Man. Curious tourists rushed to get a picture or even just a glimpse of this legendary man. Words of encouragement rang all around our story's hero, as he fled for his life. To the guard, however, the crowd offered rude remarks and a slap or two instead. Much to the guard's dismay, the crowd sealed back up as soon as Marvel Man passed by, obstructing his way. This brought some *insensitive-ish* remarks from the FPL Elite Commander.

Marvel Man gave a grateful wave to the crowd as the finally broke through. His once well circulated newspaper-blog "Marvel's Corner" had earned him some adoration from the general population.

"Quickly Marvel Man, in here!", a young woman cried out. Trusting his instincts, Marvel Man quickly turned and headed into the small shop. As soon as he was in, the woman slammed the door shut and began to set several locks and bolts. "Thank ya mam. Not everyone would hide a wanted man like myself.", Marvel Man said, as he tried to recover his breath.

"Well, not everyone is a proud CBUB League Member.", the woman said in a cheerful tone. Reaching behind her, she pulled out a worn out League Pin. On it, the once great "League of Extraordinary CBUBers" logo was seen. Marvel Man looked up in awe and surprise, but quickly flashed her a smile.

"I had always thought that women were prohibited from the CBUB. The Admins kept them all locked up in the FPL.", Marvel Man said. The woman nodded. She smiled again. She had nice white teeth.

"No. I wasn't in the CBUB myself. This belonged to my father. He was an old member who enjoyed what you tried to do. He left for the rebel headquarters, back when they were taking recruits. Left me some money and this pin. Anyways, word on the street is that you found some juicy information. Mind telling little ol' me?" The woman moved closer to Marvel Man. Our hero stepped back, but quickly realized that he was up against a wall.

"... eh. Yeah, I got something good. But I really shouldn't say. I need to get this to the others' before I start telling pretty ladies like yourself.", Marvel Man gulped out. He gave her a nervous grin.

"Ah, so you do think I'm pretty!", she happily proclaimed, moving closer still. "Come on. What do I have to do for you to tell me this big secret?"

Marvel Man felt her getting closer still. "Uh... Who did you say your father was again? I'm good with names."

The woman looked startled, but quickly closed the gap between the two. Now her body was pressed up against his. "His name was... Marvelfan15."

Marvel Man's eyes widened. In one quick motion, he threw the woman back. "Almost had me. But Marvelfan didn't have kids. Who are you?!", he shouted out, as he began to slowly make his way towards the door. His eyes were focused on the girl. To his dismay, she began to change shape.

"Ah. I should've guesses Artemis right? Maybe SirMethos? My bad. Anyways, it is I!", the changing blob cried out. "ME! LORD IVAN!!!"

Marvel Man did not wait a second longer. He turned and ran like a little girl. In other words, he did the smart thing. Marvel Man rushed outside and ran towards his original goal, the city's railroad. Seeing a big crowd up ahead, Marvel Man attempted to blend in and maybe get a couple seconds to rest. To his dismay, the crowd had other ideas.

"QUACK!", one member said, as he attempted to tackle Marvel Man. Marvel Man dodged him, but was quickly grabbed from behind by another crowd member. "Let go of me!", he shouted.

"QUACK!", the member answered. "QUACK! QUACK!" the other's agreed. They dove on top of him, pinning his arms and legs to the ground. Marvel Man slipped out one arm and gave several quick punches. Free, he jumped to his feet and slapped away the mind controlled crowd's hands. "I have information that can help all of us!", Marvel Man shouted at them, as he turned to run.

"QUACK! QUACK! QUAAACK!", the mindless horde responded, as they burst after him. The crowd was fast, and Marvel Man was already tired. He gasped for air as he spotted a sewer hole. If he could just make it, he might get away.

"QUACK!", a member shouted, as he grabbed Marvel Man's leg. Marvel Man shook him off, but this caused him to stumble. He heard Ivan's laughter as he fell to the ground. He was a couple inches away from the sewer hole, but it might as well have been miles. The crowd was upon him now. There was more quacking as they ripped his clothes to shreds. It was all over. Darkness began to call Marvel Man.

But then, quite suddenly, a hand reached out and pulled him. The crowd gave some more quacks of surprise as their prey was taken away. Yanking him with great strength, the arm dragged Marvel Man into the sewer. Marvel Man fell into the filthy waters with a splash, but was quickly pulled out by the same powerful arms as before.

"That was close Marvel. You're lucky we were here.", a voice said.

"We?", Marvel Man weakly replied.

"Of course. The League is back..."

Jesus random numbers is so there during this one.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 10:19 PM

I'm still torn about whether I am loyal to the trolls or the CBUB. I guess that's gonna come out a lot during the story.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 10:31 PM

basic outline of plot:
beginning: the banishment is used on someone innocent, the sides are formed, most charater developement ocurs here.
middle: the admins twist the mind of the rebel known as bobisbeast and get him to go to the fpl in order to get info, in the meantime marvelman manages to get a piece of information from the admins and after a close attak unites with the league of cbub, the neighboring countries join the war, meanwhile the trolls begin plotting their attack on khazan. the lands of arpia may begin to get attaked here
end: the remains of the league arrive at the heart of cbub, and the armies of cbub go towards FPL, the trolls charge toward khazan, the arpians do whatever hugo wants the arpians to do, the admins meanwhile prepare the greatest weapon... the IVANBOMB

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 10:35 PM

basic outline of plot:
beginning: the banishment is used on someone innocent, the sides are formed, most charater developement ocurs here.
middle: the admins twist the mind of the rebel known as bobisbeast and get him to go to the fpl in order to get info, in the meantime marvelman manages to get a piece of information from the admins and after a close attak unites with the league of cbub, the neighboring countries join the war, meanwhile the trolls begin plotting their attack on khazan. the lands of arpia may begin to get attaked here
end: the remains of the league arrive at the heart of cbub, and the armies of cbub go towards FPL, the trolls charge toward khazan, the arpians do whatever hugo wants the arpians to do, the admins meanwhile prepare the greatest weapon... the IVANBOMB

feel free to make changes if ya want.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 10:47 PM

basic outline of plot:
beginning: the banishment is used on someone innocent, the sides are formed, most charater developement ocurs here.
middle: the admins twist the mind of the rebel known as bobisbeast and get him to go to the fpl in order to get info, in the meantime marvelman manages to get a piece of information from the admins and after a close attak unites with the league of cbub, the neighboring countries join the war, meanwhile the trolls begin plotting their attack on khazan. the lands of arpia may begin to get attaked here
end: the remains of the league arrive at the heart of cbub, and the armies of cbub go towards FPL, the trolls charge toward khazan, the arpians do whatever hugo wants the arpians to do, the admins meanwhile prepare the greatest weapon... the IVANBOMB


Looks pretty good so far. Some questions: If there are "neighboring countries," are we to consider the entirety of EF an empire? Also, what country are we talking about here that is being neighbored (What country is central to the conflict)? Khazan is a city and the capital of the empire, correct? So what country have we decided that Khazan is in? I think a map might help me understand the geography. Please someone make one, a good one.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 10:50 PM

Looks pretty good so far. Some questions: If there are "neighboring countries," are we to consider the entirety of EF an empire? Also, what country are we talking about here that is being neighbored (What country is central to the conflict)? Khazan is a city and the capital of the empire, correct? So what country have we decided that Khazan is in? I think a map might help me understand the geography. Please someone make one, a good one.

I always imagined Khazan to be something of a floating country.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 10:52 PM

Looks pretty good so far. Some questions: If there are "neighboring countries," are we to consider the entirety of EF an empire? Also, what country are we talking about here that is being neighbored (What country is central to the conflict)? Khazan is a city and the capital of the empire, correct? So what country have we decided that Khazan is in? I think a map might help me understand the geography. Please someone make one, a good one.

tropetopia and whatever we made wikipedia is around there, and youve seen the map... or the first draft anyways.

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Posted 21 August 2011 - 10:53 PM

I always imagined Khazan to be something of a floating country.


Well then, sooner or later we will have to make and post a map. Otherwise members will get confused.

Edit: I did indeed see a map, but it was on chat and I couldn't get a good look at it. Also, it should be posted for others to review and use for a reference. Who has the map! Give it to us!




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